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    dots Submission Name: she wouldnt...dots
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    Author: wonderbread1000
    ASL Info:    22 / male / ...
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 33/6/4
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 882
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    Bytes: 599



    Description:
       i lost someone...but found another. this is how i feel now...


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    as if option never existed,
    should consequential parting of ways
    persuade an underlying moral
    upon the decision of my heart?
    ...due to request, to complicate,
    with efforts quite ill-timed,
    chastised accordingly, i did promise
    such a love she had never known.
    however, i surely found,
    without, one finds enough...
    not merely to make ends, though,
    rather, to satisfy, accordingly.
    for as a helpless situation admits
    the premise-bound solution,
    would she not then argue the point?
    i suppose not...




    Submitted on 2007-05-11 16:48:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Reading it another time, and after your last comment i can see more clearly what you are getting at. It intrests me the part where you said that you've ended it many times in our head... havn't we all?... and i think that clearly reflects the first question the peom asks... i love this peice.. it begs to question all of loe, and what we say how much of it is real, is there a reason why we act and and feel... you speak in both the poem and your comment abut helpless situations, and in a way this is so much more than the typical poem boy meets girl, fall in love, question relationship poem, no this poem question the fundementals of human emotion and love, and almost to a pint addiciton of another person, and the destiny, and what is and will not be given up for destiny over comfort... seriously an amazing and wonderful peice!!
    much love
    kaity
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Kaitylizzy | [ Reply to This ]
      I read this and am a little confused.. and it could just be that it's a little over my head. But if i may ask so that i can understand it better.. is it right to inturrpret that you promised to love a girl, but in the end ou could only love her so far, and at the end of that it couldn't be mathed? i'm probably way off. Overall i like the way it makes the reader think and question, the lines seem to guide the reader to an underlying theme, even to questions that might be more than just love and relationships. The first four lines i think are beautiful, i love thequestion of deul actions and what the heart feels over the mind and moral compass. In a way this peice seems to be a quick almost a confusion, but it reflects the emotion. I hope you'll right back becasue this fasinates me, and i would love to learn more aobut this peice, but it is a little above my understanding, so please guide me!!
    much love
    kaity
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Kaitylizzy | [ Reply to This ]


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