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    dots Submission Name: A day in the life of a fooldots

    Author: flyfire
    ASL Info:    17, Female, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 33/19/14
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 692
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Hey hey, hope you enjoy it. I've got it posted on my other account on poetry.tetto as well.

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    dotsA day in the life of a fooldots

    stand at the door
    of your room
    and gaze.
    Light surrounds you
    as you sway
    spellbound by music
    in front
    of the window.
    Headphones rest
    on your ears,
    hair falls over your face
    and a smile of
    crosses it
    as you spread your fingers
    over your stomach,
    your touch unhurried,
    (who are you thinking of?).
    Languid music
    makes you numb to the world
    and you are ignorant
    to my presence,
    not aware that anyone
    has found you like this,
    from your daily lies
    and faked innocence …

    [you look so beautiful.]

    …and it’s times like now
    that I wonder what
    my mother would say,
    if her daughter
    brought her girlfriend home.

    Submitted on 2007-05-12 03:22:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      good imagery
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
      she would probaPbly say that you have a mental illness that stems from a F U C Ked up upbringing.. unsurfaced issues that need to be addressed...

    but anyway, like it or love it... homosexuality is an illness and a disease... it's abnormal, like diabetes or bipolar.

    | Posted on 2007-05-12 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]

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