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Old Cups Of Memories


Author: caballero7137
ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
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Words: 108
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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Old Cups Of Memories




I am a male human
that has been looking
for many long months
for the edge of heaven
so I can reunite
just for a few words
and a couple cups
of King Cole tea
with my grandfather
and catch up
like old times.
Talking literally
about politics
and Montreal Canadian
in angles and views
that only him and I
could comprehend.

To express
sincere burdens
of regrets
for not being
by his bedside
in his dying days
but as well to relish
a special moment
for all its worth
one last time
before the tea
is all gone






Submitted on 2007-05-12 09:11:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a very sweet poem! I too wish that I could find the edge of heaven and talk with a few of my lost loved ones. A very gorgeous piece,

Good luck to you,
-aNNmARIE
| Posted on 2007-05-13 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]


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