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    dots Submission Name: Old Cups Of Memoriesdots
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    Author: caballero7137
    ASL Info:    22/m/victoriaville
    Elite Ratio:    0.72 - 9/104/123
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 868
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 741



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    dotsOld Cups Of Memoriesdots
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    I am a male human
    that has been looking
    for many long months
    for the edge of heaven
    so I can reunite
    just for a few words
    and a couple cups
    of King Cole tea
    with my grandfather
    and catch up
    like old times.
    Talking literally
    about politics
    and Montreal Canadian
    in angles and views
    that only him and I
    could comprehend.

    To express
    sincere burdens
    of regrets
    for not being
    by his bedside
    in his dying days
    but as well to relish
    a special moment
    for all its worth
    one last time
    before the tea
    is all gone






    Submitted on 2007-05-12 09:11:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very sweet poem! I too wish that I could find the edge of heaven and talk with a few of my lost loved ones. A very gorgeous piece,

    Good luck to you,
    -aNNmARIE
    | Posted on 2007-05-13 00:00:00 | by aNNmARIE | [ Reply to This ]


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