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    dots Submission Name: To Hold Ondots
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    Author: Keaton Volkov
    ASL Info:    18/M/Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 22/17/13
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Haiku/Depressed
    Total Views: 675
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 82



    Description:
       I wrote this when really depressed and figured out that killing myself was admitting defeat. And since I refuse to admit defeat in anything I do, I'm staying on this earth for as long as I'm needed. And I'm not taking death into my own hands.


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    dotsTo Hold Ondots
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    It would be easy
    To take my own life away.
    But still I stand strong.




    Submitted on 2007-05-13 00:08:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The poem is simple, and in this case, it's a good thing. You could have added more, but it didn't really need more, I guess.

    Ha, I'm rambling aren't I? I'm done now.

    Keep Writing,
    Elle
    | Posted on 2007-05-13 00:00:00 | by GetFighted | [ Reply to This ]


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