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    dots Submission Name: always wakingdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsalways wakingdots
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    inside the floating miracles
    of demonic pride
    always
    trailing
    down
    the wings of colour
    crowds of broken eyes
    and the time we spend
    in missing
    being amidst
    eachothers breath

    i've been mending hair again
    devising a way to fix the ground
    the way it seems to melt away beneath me
    and the shadows again
    slipping through those walls each night
    visiting as though they were real

    there is a peace
    in knowing that one is whole
    and that whatever has been torn from me
    is something i never had
    in every other moment
    i am new

    once again i pass
    and am passing
    and have passed
    i will awaken always
    yet i will sleep within
    swallowed
    amused
    and
    amazed




    Submitted on 2007-05-13 14:37:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a great work... there is a message in the underlying tone of your writing that resonates in the soul of the reader. The work has movement and contrast, color, remanicent of my favorite impressionistic art.
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by dreamer_s_angst | [ Reply to This ]
      ah the bright one's fall from grace, how you draw it into human form and breath life into our foibles. beauty i bow before you


    in shadow
    | Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this poem. It has such apeacefull feeling to it

    there is a peace
    in knowing that one is whole
    and that whatever has been torn from me
    is something i never had

    I love those lines they are so simple yet complex and really relatable. Once again great job.
    | Posted on 2007-05-13 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      inside the floating miracles
    of demonic pride
    always
    trailing
    down
    the wings of colour
    crowds of broken eyes

    I reallly like it when you rhyme, especiallyy when you do. its twice as amazing

    and although sometimes you use the same words, it never gets boring. there's always something different in the way you compose things.

    I always look in the dictionary, and try to find new words so it'll read more interesting. and make people think (and of course help me in my vocab).
    I think without reading or writing, I would be hella dumb. thanks to poetry
    | Posted on 2007-05-13 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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