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    dots Submission Name: The Silenced Quilldots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 369/381/227
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       It is hard to deal with the silence of writers & moreso if they have passed into the other life when their quill finally ceases to sing. Watch out for the minimal use of punctuation & the use of unusual phrasing.


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    dotsThe Silenced Quilldots
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    a grated gate in midnight's light
    once fell upon a sorry sight
    as rain washed out the scarlet stain
    the skies bowed down to hear the pain

    a voice without a body heard
    the sordid tale its waist did gird
    one witness found, torn leaf by leaf
    Creation's glory sank to grief

    a tale no word was writ nor said
    into the ground the silence bled
    a soaked and orphaned quill remains
    fraught with want of trilled refrains

    a poet's tome thus lay ungathered
    whispy strands of dreams untethered
    if Heaven cried its tears that night
    set up the quaich in candlelight



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    Submitted on 2007-05-13 21:11:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very powerful piece, especially for me, with my best friend having stopped doing poetry this year. It almost hurts, to see someone so talented, drop their pen.


    You spoke my mind almost perfectly. Absolutely a fav.

    And the minimal use of punctuation works, give's it a really....bleak feel.

    Thanks for an amazing piece.

    ~Keiran~
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by Keiran | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm a rhyme fan. I reckon rhymes (for poets who get it) are integrated with the sense of the verse. I think you're doing this and I love it! I also like the visual imagery, it's vivid. I can't figure out what it's about, even with the outside clue from your description. But that's probably not a criticism when addresses to somebody called CrypticPoet! Actually I think cryptic is fine!
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This was moving. Deeply.

    It hit a certain spot inside me. I don't know,...ne...I'm bad with explanations. Hmm. It made me want to reach out and steal back the author's life...if only to have him/her continue on.

    Awesome piece, favorites for sure.

    -Sennie.
    | Posted on 2007-05-13 00:00:00 | by Drifting Star | [ Reply to This ]


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