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    dots Submission Name: Shiver(Breathe)dots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 658
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    Breathe, breathe,
    And only breathe,
    For I will always be,
    Here to haunt you…

    I Shiver

    When you fall down,
    I will fall down,
    With you,
    And when you drown,
    I will drown,
    With you,
    And I won’t breathe,
    Unless you do…

    I Shiver

    Breathe, breathe,
    And only breathe,
    For I will always be,
    Here to haunt you…

    Submitted on 2007-05-14 09:43:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like how you expressed self-sacrifice in so few words. This is something that I have a hard time expressing but you put it in such a good format and the flow is exceptional. The love you have for her is beyond this world, and I hope everything works out for the both of you.
    | Posted on 2007-12-06 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it... The poem is really good.. I like the format and the way it flows... It kind of reminds me when I was little. Me and my twin had this sixth sense.. If he was ever in pain or upset I could feel it from miles away.. That may not be what is meant but that's what I got from it.. Good wright.
    | Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm... I like how you formatted it, :D. It's actually pretty good. I just don't understand exactly where you got the inspiration from. So, yea, it's nice, though.
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]

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