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    dots Submission Name: Lovely Lostdots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1092
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 298



    Description:
       lovely lost is how i was feeling the other day after i got done crying my eyes out, it felt so good, there are so many things i know about the people around me but yet some how i feel like they dont know a single thing about me.


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    dotsLovely Lostdots
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    Sweet echoes
    Of drowning thoughts

    Mesmered by
    The night sky

    So close yet
    So far away

    Deathly as
    Day come by

    No reason to stay
    No reason to go

    No longer with
    People I know




    Submitted on 2007-05-14 11:15:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like this piece... i actualy get it... i quess you have to understand how you felt to understand this piece...
    | Posted on 2007-11-08 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
      "Mesmered"???? do you mean mesmerized??
    i did not like this. sorry i cant be more supportive. it just seems like it doesnt really say anything at all.
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]


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