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    dots Submission Name: Crazy Minddots
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    Author: dreamer37517
    ASL Info:    25/F/Bama
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 161/149/49
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       I have an older verison of this one, but I didn't really like it, or I wanted to make it stronger, crazier.....and this is what I came up with.


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    dotsCrazy Minddots
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    True silence is my preferred style...
    But only for a little while.
    For when I slowly close my eyes,
    All my chaos quickly thrives.

    My mind is twisted, my dreams are cruel,
    Inside is someone that no one knew.
    Its hard to keep them all held within,
    I fight the struggle, but will I win?

    Devilish concepts and evil convictions,
    Can lead to such unholy intentions.
    Keep them locked up? Keep them secure?
    How much pressure can I endure?

    Inside is a war thats full of pain,
    But I keep my outside looking sane.
    Corrupted with sin and drowning in shame.
    A smile in place is the the daily aim.

    Wicked thoughts drift through my head,
    Eternal insanity is what I dread.
    So when you think I am sweet and kind,
    Imagine what lies in my crazy mind.





    Submitted on 2007-05-14 13:39:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this flows with the rhythm of the cruel thoughts in my head..the ones that keep me awake even when i close my eyes....

    there is that other me inside...normal is simply the mask i wear...

    i wish i could do this...seems my moods, thoughts, heart is worn on my sleeve...anyone can tell there is something churning inside when there is...i don't hide so well...

    except for a few grammatical parts, spellings, apostrophes...minor...

    this reads quite smoothly...sounds nice aloud.

    details well that introspection that constantly grinds our gears.
    | Posted on 2011-03-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome! I love it, especially the ending. It's exactly how I see myself: Psycho on the inside, normal on the out. It's just a brilliant creation, I can't think of what else to say.
    Well done,

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    DBE™
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by DBE | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. I love it. It's practically exactly how I am. Almost like you had a window to my mind. The smile on the outside, the vicious battle within. From preferring silence to unholy dreams, all the voices inside planning wicked schemes. Looking kind and sweet on the outside, on the inside insane. Are you sure you don't have a portal to look into my brain? Or could it be that you're exactly the same. Cursed to live this life "drowning in shame". No matter the inspiration, I thoroughly like it. It's going on my favs, it's a great piece of lit.

    The Bird
    | Posted on 2007-05-22 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written fantastically. I loved it. I have written many like this, so I know what you feel. It flowed perfectly, rhymed well. All in all it was great, I haven't anything bad to say. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    Saint Raxor
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by brknprclndol | [ Reply to This ]
      Indeed, sometimes, i think, we all have some evil thoughts. The thought to wrap your fingers around that particular persons throat and squeeze and squeeze until they stop struggling, or the urge to pick up that desk and chuck it at that kid who keeps saying those things and doesn't know how many ways you know to kill him. But anyway, nice poem, i guess you could say i can relate to it ;)
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by Ihvaor | [ Reply to This ]
      hahaha. truth at its finest. i really like this, thats all i can really say. good overall, i actually re-read it outloud and it sounds even better. hats off. woo.
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]


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