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    dots Submission Name: Daydreamdots
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    Author: Lizzy B
    ASL Info:    17/F/la-la land (MI)
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 79/67/40
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 843
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    Description:
       IDK I was just daydreaming in class


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    dotsDaydreamdots
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    He stands up front
    The usual monotonous lecture
    My mind switches to autopilot
    And I begin to fly away
    Cuba, Hawaii, Paris
    Where to go this time?
    Horseback riding on the beach?
    Skating beneath the Eiffle Tower?
    Boating down the Amazon River?
    Or just laying beneath the stars?
    I fly over the city
    Out over the wide blue ocean
    Up through the cotton clouds
    Ah, I'm over Africa
    To watch the Elephants
    Lions, cheetahs, and gazel
    They all carry on living
    Oblivious to my presense
    Then a bell rings out
    I'm jerked back to the class
    I put away my books
    Follow my friends out
    And wonder where I'll go tomorrow




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