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    dots Submission Name: differencesdots

    Author: Thief
    ASL Info:    22/male/plainview
    Elite Ratio:    4.8 - 180/80/69
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       just needed to get it all out.

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    call me irresponsible or whatever you want to,
    the fact is, i got more problems than you do.
    i cant afford what you can, my dear,
    fancy phones,$20 dollar tickets, or even the latest gear.
    youve got it easy and take for granted everyday
    you dont have to work for a hard earned pay
    i on the other hand work against my will
    and just to make it through everynow and then i make i little kill
    YOU dont have the death of someone on you mind
    your spoiled and protected from MY KIND
    you wouldnt last one day in my life
    you dont know what is pain, suffering, and strife.
    everyday is one step closer to dying
    every second is me feeling like crying
    but i cant show that shit
    and im still dying bit by bit
    a broken heart is hard to mend
    but its love that allows reality to bend
    i will get stronger, and you will get richer
    and life will get more bitter
    so shut the fuck up and leave me alone
    go bother your little fuckin clone

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      I can really relate i think
    sometimes it seems like people are very...
    ignorant to whats really going on around them
    like they dont understand anything that they havent seen
    they havent seen the [censored]
    so they dont know the [censored]
    you know
    i hope i got the right vibe from this post
    either way
    i liked it
    | Posted on 2009-04-17 00:00:00 | by UnbrokenHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there angry handsome,
    lol. Don't take that personally(the angry part - I toned it down with the handsome part haha). I just took a look through your poems, and saw alot of anger. It's what poetry is used for - the letting go of emotion. Putting yourself, and everything you feel on display for someone else. Some of us have the hopes that others will see the beauty in our pain, and others are simply doing it as a release. I'm going to guess you need the release?
    Quite frankly, if you wanted praise from your releases, the only thing I'd tell you to change is maybe just a little grammar editing.
    Your pain and anger, anguish and thought are all laying out on my computer screen; you got it across so well. Your view on the world was not only explained but completely Told. Like cramming the words into your readers mouth, so that when they leave, they might just say the same things.
    That's what draws my attention to you. I find it brilliant in a somewhat warped way. It's art as it should be.
    Yet, I would love to see what you're capable of if you pushed yourself for another genre. Is ranting your strength here, or simply your preference?
    Well, you have way too much potential for me to just walk by your page and not leave a comment. Hopefully I haven't said anything to offend you. Feel free to offend me back if I have. lol.
    Keep writing stranger. :)
    | Posted on 2008-01-26 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]

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