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    dots Submission Name: fourteen yearsdots
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    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 720
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    Description:
       my father died when I was 2 years old and I write this on the 14th year annaversary of his death.


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    In loving memory of a father, friend, son and love.

    A man, a child, a person,
    who felt his life was too tough.

    He was young, and strong, and willful.
    Brought joy and memories.

    Terry Bailey will be missed,
    as will his hopes and dreams.

    Two daughters, only two years apart,
    who will never know their father.

    A house that was once a home,
    will never hear his laughter.

    Fourteen years in his grave,
    and fourteen years not forgotten.

    That many years of tears and smiles,
    of other lives well written.

    On this day, the fourteenth of May,
    we remember one human being.

    A father, friend, son and love,
    who lived and died with meaning.




    Submitted on 2007-05-14 15:18:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree totally with Max. I really liked this alot. And im sorry for your loss. I cant imagen what it would be like to live without a father. It looks like you put a great deal of thought into this. You didnt just throw this together i really liked it.
    I also find this poem to be super orginal, i don't recall ever reading something similar to this.
    9.5/10 for me personally.
    good job i wish you well, and may your father rest in peace.
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      Baby Girl.......This was Great you can tell you put all emtions in this piece. So well written a lil choppy but it has a great meaning.

    I Love You

    Max
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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