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    dots Submission Name: I am Tired...dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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       just watch the movie Green Mile... interesting movie. quiet sad actully.. nevetheless it got me thinking..


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    dots I am Tired...dots
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    ... Can't you see why I'm so exhausted?
    Why my eyes feel as if they are heavy weights…
    Simply longing for me to close these eye-lids of mine for a great amount of time…

    For I am tired of seeing people so nasty to others
    And for what reason?
    No other reason than to simply be nasty…

    For I am tired of seeing others hurt, and their pain brought on by family and friends...

    I am tried of seeing people killed or shot at simply because they are in a classroom,
    Trying to get that education that their parents weren't able to receive…

    For I am tired of seeing this world fall down beneath its feet and not getting back up,
    Simply pulling others down with it.

    All my eye-lids long for me to do is to forever close these eyes of mine...
    To no longer be tired of this world I live in,
    To no longer feel the pain and suffering of others…

    Although I may not cause this pain,
    I feel it,
    I see it,

    And this my friend makes me just as guilty as to whom caused the pain to these individuals…
    For I am not helping
    I am simply writing…
    I am not praying…
    I am simply writing…

    Please Lord; give me the strength to go on with this life I lead.
    Give me the courage to help those whom are in need.
    And Lord...

    Bless those whom need to be bless…

    Amen.




    Submitted on 2007-05-14 15:22:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First Comment!!!! It's pretty cool, you seem to feel guilty what happens to other people, but only one thing wasn't true.... People who cause it don't feel guilty cause they're ****s, but who cares, I found my way along it (I've almost set up a band!!!)
    | Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]


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