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    dots Submission Name: Let's Fight Like Debutants Dodots

    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       So, yeah, my friend and I are fighting...again. Wow...aren't I such a teen. This is more of a vent than anything else, but I would appreciate any comments at all! Thanks! ^_^

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    dotsLet's Fight Like Debutants Dodots

    Sometimes, after all these years,
    I can't help but wonder,
    if you're worth all these tears.

    You, my best friend on the planet,
    who finally said poor poor me to much,
    who said she had all the talent.

    Yes, you, the one who angered way too easily,
    the one I couldn't take being around another moment,
    and made me choke on your ego until it made me queasy,

    Oh my, yes, that is the one I talk of,
    the one that thinks too much with heart instead of head,
    Who wouldn't understand anything, love.

    Is it wrong to hate you then?
    Probably not, not now,
    No...no...not the person who claims to be a friend.

    But no longer are you a friend,
    you, she, that girl,
    she is

    Submitted on 2007-05-14 16:35:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a perfect read for me right now. I'm going through the exact thing with my so called friend...we've been fighting alot too.....isnt that horrible.
    I especially love the first stanza, cause after so much pain and tears, you do have to wonder is it worth it.
    But the thing is, you look back at all the great times and see that the good does out do the bad and realize that it is worth it.
    So Im hoping me and her can hopefully work it out....I just dont know though.
    Anyways, sorry about the rambling. Point is, you got your anger out. Now you just got to figure it out. Everyone goes through this. You wrote it great in you own words. Good write.
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      now this i like. it didn't take the turn that i thought it would. and the end, that girl you always knew and loved died. not meaning the relationship could be gone forever but atleast that girl you grew to know did die and things have to change from then on out. well thats what i got haha. keep it up woooo.
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]

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