Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Let's Fight Like Debutants Dodots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 638
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 846



    Description:
       So, yeah, my friend and I are fighting...again. Wow...aren't I such a teen. This is more of a vent than anything else, but I would appreciate any comments at all! Thanks! ^_^


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLet's Fight Like Debutants Dodots
    -------------------------------------------


    Sometimes, after all these years,
    I can't help but wonder,
    if you're worth all these tears.

    You, my best friend on the planet,
    who finally said poor poor me to much,
    who said she had all the talent.

    Yes, you, the one who angered way too easily,
    the one I couldn't take being around another moment,
    and made me choke on your ego until it made me queasy,

    Oh my, yes, that is the one I talk of,
    the one that thinks too much with heart instead of head,
    Who wouldn't understand anything, love.

    Is it wrong to hate you then?
    Probably not, not now,
    No...no...not the person who claims to be a friend.

    But no longer are you a friend,
    you, she, that girl,
    she is
    dead.




    Submitted on 2007-05-14 16:35:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This was a perfect read for me right now. I'm going through the exact thing with my so called friend...we've been fighting alot too.....isnt that horrible.
    I especially love the first stanza, cause after so much pain and tears, you do have to wonder is it worth it.
    But the thing is, you look back at all the great times and see that the good does out do the bad and realize that it is worth it.
    So Im hoping me and her can hopefully work it out....I just dont know though.
    Anyways, sorry about the rambling. Point is, you got your anger out. Now you just got to figure it out. Everyone goes through this. You wrote it great in you own words. Good write.
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      now this i like. it didn't take the turn that i thought it would. and the end, that girl you always knew and loved died. not meaning the relationship could be gone forever but atleast that girl you grew to know did die and things have to change from then on out. well thats what i got haha. keep it up woooo.
    | Posted on 2007-05-14 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    142593

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Fasade written by jackz
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Cover written by saartha
    My Four Seasons written by faideddarkness
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Yes written by poetotoe
    an unashamed poverty written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    AI written by poetotoe
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    Every..... written by jackz
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    a safe place written by Daniel Barlow
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (6) written by endlessgame23
    to Be like written by KeeperOfLight
    Comme un lion en avril written by Outlaw
    The Unicorn written by BlazeFlamme
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Where? written by ParanoidParadox
    Love written by saartha
    prison written by ShyOne
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    the testing of hypotheses written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry