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    dots Submission Name: Dead Deer dots

    Author: Guernica
    ASL Info:    17/male
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 77/114/67
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDead Deer dots

    I wish I'd been the one to hit it,
    then I'd be carrying the guilt,
    (I am anyways)
    the jackass who rammed his front bumper up into the animal's ribcage
    gets off skotch free,

    he was probably drunk, heading home from a dinner party
    where they pontificated to each other the superiority of the human race.
    so after driving home he and his wife climb into a warm bed,
    meanwhile our deer staggers and his organs,
    the ones that used to keep him alive,
    tumble out onto the road,
    to be run over the next morning by a thousand tires.
    and what's left of him collapses in a ditch
    a few feet away from a cemetary,

    and it's laughing at him,
    a whole bunch of dead humans,
    resting quietly in their coffins and their urns,
    like our driver in his bed,
    and no one's going to disturb them,
    no one's going to drive over their intestines
    or slow down to look for a few seconds,
    just a few before they speed towards whatever it is that's always more important.

    Submitted on 2007-05-14 18:09:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ...Now, why didn't I find your works sooner?

    That is all I really have to say. This was intensively...vomit-inducing. Except I did not. Lovely roadkill. Except it is not.

    I do not like your first stanza. It's a vent. Not very shameful, as it should sound, like the rest of your poem. But then again, you can't get rid of it because it is the sort of introduction. Kind of the sitting in a classroom and mentioning this in a gap of silence, and waiting for them to say "What happened?" to continue the story.

    Then, in my mind, it turns into a music video, sort of like Duke Squad, with the little kids running into town on a car...I did not know that children can drive Escalades in Britain. News to me.

    But yes...like I said. This is thoroughly fascinating.
    | Posted on 2007-07-30 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]

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