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    dots Submission Name: some ancient functiondots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    in sandy escapes
    where the preachers hide
    beneath the skin and angels' hide
    there are flowery retreats
    into the broken waters we relieve
    & time and again
    out of some ancient function
    the birds seem to always lose their way
    disking the sky
    like some animal wrapped in rain
    i'm always so lush in this
    like some crowing banker
    or a discarded winter
    loving to the extent
    that i never have to breathe




    Submitted on 2007-05-14 18:17:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the brilliance of the ethereal form. how doth thou find the number of angels that can sit on the head of a pin? your eloquence of word leaves me...
    in shadow
    | Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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