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    dots Submission Name: brain overloaddots
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    Author: xana
    ASL Info:    17/F/SC
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 34/35/24
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsbrain overloaddots
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    overload
    crashing every cell.
    The sun is exploding, all stars have to die
    Years not felt but seen in the skin,
    experience there.....so ugly and lean.
    Alcohole driven, take off your close
    Pumped up on pills, get over your sores.
    Grasping for air, look from aside
    Our shells are so thick
    Yet tender inside.
    The sun is exploding, life at a hold....
    Did YOU feel the rain???
    brain overload




    Submitted on 2007-05-14 21:49:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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