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    dots Submission Name: Oh Peter...there you are - HOOK!dots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsOh Peter...there you are - HOOK!dots
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    Sigh into silence
    and rest there a while.
    Suspend yourself in your Self
    to gather
    together
    your wholeness.

    I took apart a radio once.
    Into pieces.
    Modified the parts
    so that I could remodel
    it into an elite sound system.

    Once upon a time
    there was a deep dark whole...

    ...follow the white rabbit!






    Submitted on 2007-05-15 12:06:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      first impressions:

    it feels a little flitty, not in a featherweight, malnourished hippie type way. in the sort of way that's reminiscent of butterflies and the northern lights.

    i like the combination of the mechanical & spiritual -- radio v. Self (with capital s).

    i like the word play

    i have a particular sound in my head, reading this, but i'm not sure how to convey it, so i won't try. i will say that i would love to one day hear it.
    | Posted on 2009-05-05 00:00:00 | by etheror | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi
    I havent seen you posting in a while
    WELCOME BACK!!!
    Its good to have you back
    In this write I feel like I am lost in an imaginery world
    You know the kind of world every child goes to every once in a while to escape reality
    Very well said and written
    Great Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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