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    dots Submission Name: I just want him to calldots
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    Author: Olcia
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 6/9/7
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This poem holds within it all the feelings I felt towards a certain someone I thought would be special to me. He wasn't. But although I don't see it now, he's probably the truest friend I've got.


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    dotsI just want him to calldots
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    I know he too is awake and stirring
    And I'm not alone, kept from sleep
    Despite night's games of dreams and sheep

    I wonder how he'd start, a yawn, a hello
    Would it feel right
    To feel his embracing voice tonight

    I wonder what he thinks of this late
    Of the places he'd been, the girls that he knew?
    Or the twist of fate that joined us two?

    Would his breath soothe me into sleep?
    I wonder if he would have said
    That great things lie for me ahead

    His words like a gentle kiss

    And I wouldn't take it to mean anything
    No
    Not anything at all

    I just want him to call




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      beautiful.
    i have thought every single one of those thoughts.
    it's a piece that put me to silence.

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    | Posted on 2007-07-10 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the rythm of the poem. I also like what went into it..like your thoughts and the imagery that appeared as I was reading it.
    | Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by ImperfectGirl1 | [ Reply to This ]


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