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    dots Submission Name: fucking shoot medots
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    Author: EEKS
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    dotsfucking shoot medots
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    he does things
    that make my stomach curl
    and twist into a heart shaped hollowness
    and it makes me want him back
    til he doesnt call me back
    and i get like this
    again and again
    and again
    and again

    So fucking shoot me
    im unglued
    im a wreck of a girl
    over some fucking dude

    i laughed at girls like this
    and now i get like this
    again and again

    he says stuff that makes me bite my lips
    and smile that stupid smile
    and i want him to love me
    til all he wants to do is touch me
    and i do this shit
    again and again
    and again
    and again

    Fucking kill me
    cause this is the real me
    a shaking shivering
    fucked up toy
    and i melt into this
    for that stupid boy

    i am in pieces
    over this
    again and again

    He stands next to me and holds my hand
    and makes me cry
    again and again
    and again and again
    and Im not some idiot thats fall apart
    but he breaks my heart
    and I just let him
    again and again

    so fucking shoot me
    im unglued
    fucking kill me
    is this the real me?
    im over it but i want him
    hes gone
    but he keeps coming back

    so fucking shoot me
    for letting him do this
    fucking shoot me
    for just being stupid





    Submitted on 2007-05-15 16:15:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey hi thanx for the comment i thought this post was great and so true to life
    i see either male or females throw themself to someone else and part of me thinks its funny and the other side saz its pathetic

    i appreciate all comments i get i am not a great writer either so dont discourage yourself on commenting

    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      This is [censored] awesome!!! Some spelling errors, but all well, I hear you. Repeating the same thing over and over again when all you want is the love you feel for him returned in the same fashion that you give them. I really enjoyed this and am going to fav it.

    P.s. Is the first line suppose to say does or say dies? Please let me know, thanks.
    | Posted on 2007-05-15 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]


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