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    dots Submission Name: u and idots

    Author: Fougene
    ASL Info:    17/m/Saskatoon Canada
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 23/22/39
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 842
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1242


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    dotsu and idots

    u is a cup of water
    i is a one-eyed fish
    living in a cup of water
    u is a very big net
    i is a wingless butterfly
    caught in a very big net
    u is a happy little boat
    i is the arms of the sea
    holding up a happy little board
    u is a horse-shoe magnet
    i is for iron
    drawn towards a horse-shoe magnet

    u is everything to i
    i is not anything without u
    u and i should always be together

    u is well rounded
    i is simple
    u is aesthetic
    i is dull
    u sometimes needs more space
    thatís good because i can fit anywhere
    u sometimes needs to belong somewhere
    thatís also good because i is like a sturdy wall
    u can lean on i anytime.

    if u didnít want to be by i anymore
    that would be really sad
    because i would be like
    a fish without its one eye
    a wingless butterfly without its antenna
    an arm of the sea without the hand
    a singular candle dark and unlit
    because i would be like
    iron without the i

    Submitted on 2007-05-15 19:57:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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