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    dots Submission Name: lyrical poem 2dots
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    Author: Ignis Fatuus
    ASL Info:    18/m/earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.23 - 19/29/20
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1085
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       more lyrics turned into a semi-cohesive poem. Have a look. I have more. Found poetry I guess.


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    dotslyrical poem 2dots
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    Iím trying to forget that Iím addicted to you
    Somewhere the one I want to be withs with somebody else
    I stuck around so I could watch us fight for all the wrong reasons.
    Cause sheís bittersweet, she knocks me off my feet
    But youíve been cold to me so long Iím crying icicles instead of tears.
    And I said, what about, Breakfast at Tiffanyís?
    Like a bat out of hell Iíll be gone gone gone
    Wonít put my tender heart in a blender/ watch it swirl round to a beautiful oblivion
    Donít mind me Iím watching you two from the closet
    Iím sinking slowly, so hurry hold me
    How the hell did we wind up like this
    This is how you remind me of what I really am
    Itís like a bad movie, sheís lookin through me




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