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    dots Submission Name: Lyrical poem 3: different themedots

    Author: Ignis Fatuus
    ASL Info:    18/m/earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.23 - 19/29/20
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A bit longer, a break form my normal form. Found poetry I guess. Any thoughts on other themes I coudl do these on?

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    dotsLyrical poem 3: different themedots

    If somebody loves you/ wonít they always love you
    And yes Iíve dreamt of you to
    I borrow things that I donít need for conversationís sake
    You hold me so close that my knees grow weak
    wherever weíre together, thatís my home
    Iíd forgot how nice romance is
    Canít forget, wonít regret, what I did for love
    And I would do anything for love
    Iíd run right into hell and back
    When I close my eyes itís you I see
    Iíd do anything, just to hold you in my arms
    Nothing compares to you
    Being friends with you was never second best
    I would walk 1000 miles if I could just see you, tonight
    I can see paradise by the dashboard light
    When the time comes Iíll take you away
    I never dreamed that youíde be mine.

    Submitted on 2007-05-15 20:26:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lines from songs and such, stolen and woven into a poem? It shows a bit, sometimes more from the ideas behind the lines having been beaten into the collective conciousness by "pop culture" (which isn't really culture at all, just a bad excuse for not having a real culture). So some of them have become clichť and such. The juxtaposition of the lines creates an interesting, if fractured effect, but for some lines the original context is carried with and overshadows what might have been your intent- or perhaps drawing upon that context was your intent, as you said- borrowed words for conversation's sake, for easy relating and such. There's much that can be done with that. I hesitate to call this experimental, but there's some ideas here as far as constructing poetry that could be elaborated on, so don't throw it away.
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]

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