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    dots Submission Name: Mother May I?dots

    Author: ollie_wicked
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 320/199/89
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       written 5/14/07

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    dotsMother May I?dots

    Mother may I
    fall asleep?
    I need to but your
    yelling is keeping me wide eyed.

    Mother May I
    Please just eat?
    You make me feel enormous
    when you say i should find another bathing suit.

    Mother May I
    Just live without you?
    Hearing your silence of unappreciation
    Hurts me more than the yelling.

    Mother May I
    Please just cry?
    Because you make me feel
    like my house is a battle field where i can't be weak.

    Submitted on 2007-05-15 22:02:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i dont know why but for some reason this one never got sent to me so i hadnt read it yet. its sad. youre not fat. but you know that. your mom is a just a skank. great poem though.
    | Posted on 2007-05-31 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      I think more thought good be put hind the words used in this poem.
    But I loved the idea behind it. I have to agree with you, I have alot of problems with my Mom and sometimes just wish she would leave me alone....
    | Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by BigDreams | [ Reply to This ]

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