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    dots Submission Name: Neglecteddots
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    Author: MysterydarkPoet
    ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
    Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157/295/173
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsNeglecteddots
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    Rock me soflty, sweetly
    Lay me down to sleep
    Bury me, forget me
    Kill me with your silence
    Shun me, run from me
    Pain is all i ever feel

    Mummy can't you hear me calling
    I'm crying out your name
    Can't you feel me whispering
    All these things I pain
    You could call just to forget
    to tell me you love me
    but to call & not at all
    say something

    I need something else
    Other than these pills,
    I'm insane with no reason
    & the tragedy in this scene
    I crave something else
    Something other than this
    Pass me the morphine
    Cuz I can't stop the bleeding

    This is all to real
    I can't help what i feel
    take me to nowhere
    and let me dig my grave
    & there i shall lie
    while i cry to the nothing
    that aches me inside

    Oh mummy please come save me,
    please come help me
    take me away
    cradle me and say my name
    all i ever wanted
    was for you to love me




    Submitted on 2007-05-15 22:20:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is so sad but I have to admit strikingly beautiful
    I was this person at one time
    Except it was all my own fault because I would never let someone into my life
    I am positive you are feeling a little better after letting out these emotions
    A FANTASTIC JOB!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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