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    dots Submission Name: Raindots

    Author: Katlord
    ASL Info:    24/no thanks/my room
    Elite Ratio:    2.17 - 375/199/101
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       The beauty of rain.

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    The rain is coming,
    Hard and fast.
    Will it break the thin glass?

    There are strikes of lightning in the sky,
    Sounds of thunder follow close behind.

    The window is blown open,
    The air is cold and clean.
    With each breeze comes more rain.

    It blows into my house,
    Creating beads on my arms and face.

    To be outside,
    What a wonderful thing.
    To be refreshed by such a loving beauty.

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      This just made me love rain even more that I already do. I really love your descriptions and analogies. The images running through my head were incredible. It would be excellent if it was raining right now, but alas it isn't.

    Well Bravissima to a wonderfully written piece.
    Keep writing.

    <3 Katherine
    | Posted on 2007-11-13 00:00:00 | by Katherine_Music | [ Reply to This ]
      the way you describe rain is not explicit, very clear to identify the object of your poem. I feel weird with the periods you use at each line, i do not like that part.
    .. however, i really enjoy your poem and i love the topic rain.
    take care, n write more!
    | Posted on 2007-09-30 00:00:00 | by Plum | [ Reply to This ]
      Neat, nifty and rather deftly done....I liked this muchly.... bravo... bravo... bravo ...michael
    | Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Love it. Most people run from the rain when it drizzles. I like the turn your poem takes when the rain is soothing and refreshing when you build it up to be a terrible storm. Says alot.
    | Posted on 2007-09-18 00:00:00 | by A Silver Key | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I love the way you describe rain as being refreshing and soothing. I've been known to lie on the roof of my garage when it's raining, cause it just feels so good. The first two lines almost sound sexual to me, but that's kind of cool because of rain's earthy and organic nature. It makes it feel like such a natural part of humanity to just, connect with the rain. great write!!
    the only thing i'd change is the rythm. sometimes it feels a little bit awkward, which distracts from the piece. also, some of the lines rhyme, but there's no specific rhyme scheme, which is somewhat confusing. after making those adjustments, it'll be awesome!!!
    | Posted on 2007-09-02 00:00:00 | by try_again | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this. it the description is so in depth.
    | Posted on 2007-06-13 00:00:00 | by save me | [ Reply to This ]
      The best time of night is when it rains, nothing better. I had this happen to me once... I got pissed off at my window for not staying closed so i left it open and let it rain... Great poem
    | Posted on 2007-06-12 00:00:00 | by ZaiakuSin | [ Reply to This ]
      i could feel it all as you were describing it. well done. like it.
    | Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by flyfire | [ Reply to This ]
      rain is the best. it is quite soothing tooo. i like this poem
    | Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]

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