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    dots Submission Name: rundots

    Author: vlarrimore
    ASL Info:    20/female/tampa
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 37/22/16
    Words: 338
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    i'm so tierd
    to the point where i forgot who i am
    i just feel like running away
    running so far away from life
    from reality
    no ones perfect
    at least i'm not
    have you ever wanted something so bad to be out your life?
    to the point where youll do anything to get it removed.
    its pain
    which is apart of life something that every human being experience,and go through.
    we can fix and heal everything else in the world except .
    i can laugh
    i can smile
    still underneath in my heart theres pain
    i got pain when you left
    i got pain when you stopped talking
    i got pain when i fell in love with you
    i got pain when i cried
    i got pain when i saw you cry
    i dont understand
    i cant comprehend whats going on
    you're there and then youre gone
    and when you're there you tell me you're hurting like i caused that.
    youre taking over my life
    i cant focus
    i cant think correctly
    why wont it go away
    you was suppose to be my rescuer
    to save me from this crazy life that i was born into.
    you was suppose to be ...............
    you was suppose to be there
    would my life be better if i just get it over with
    i want to go
    i want to go where my mind can be free
    and my heart restored
    at one point inmy life i thought that place was with you.
    you was the only person who i could talk to
    the only person who i could express who i am
    but i guess none of that didnt matter to you
    im so tierd
    im so tierd of life
    im so tierd of hurting
    im so tierd of being here
    im going to run
    run to the end of life
    run to the point where i can fly
    and be numb to this pain
    and free of life

    Submitted on 2007-05-16 15:55:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmmm. Well there is alot of emotion behind this. It reminds me of something I might write, mostly because of the way it is presented. Alot of random things that might not flow too well...My suggestion would be to try to focus on what you were feeling when you wrote it, and maybe....try to make it simpler, I don't know...sorry. Also it's "tired" not tierd. Don't take any offense, I generally correct people on impulse...

    | Posted on 2008-02-22 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]

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