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    dots Submission Name: Waitingdots

    Author: Samuel Bielz
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 151/182/46
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 963
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       Wrote this on a whim.....not really what I wanted to express so much....lost focus. o well

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    I looked at you again today,
    Your smile brought me to tears.
    Losing you and all we've been,
    Has been one of my biggest fears.

    I know it's true that you love me,
    I can tell by the way you care.
    You've never said it but love is a verb,
    And these days they say that it's rare.

    At times I've taken it for granted,
    This intimacy that we embrace.
    I've grown used to feeling heaven
    Everytime that I see your face.

    Even when I didn't deserve you,
    You stood right by my side.
    Through out the years you've held my hand,
    And stripped away all of my pride.

    Don't worry, Love, I'm not going away,
    But I need to hide my heart.
    Everything I thought I had,
    It all just fell apart.

    Nobody understands everything about me,
    Not close to the way that you do.
    You comfort me without even speaking,
    I've never loved anybody so true.

    You're hiding now in your beautiful heart,
    And I can almost feel your fear.
    If you decide that you need me again,
    I'll be waiting for you right here.

    Submitted on 2007-05-16 18:09:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Right on man, this is going straight to my fave, good rhyming, and the point is very clear, overall its just good, i get the feeling, and it staying in :)

    Keep writing man,

    God Bless
    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by StylerDen | [ Reply to This ]

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