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Can't Speak

Author: OrionsStorm
ASL Info:    18/M/VA
Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 180 /247 /76
Words: 66
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I dunno, a symptom of my screwed up life

Can't Speak

I can't speak, can't say a word,
my brain is spinning, can't hold on,
I'm being torn in two

I know what I want, and I know what's required, I just don't know if I have what it takes
it would be better for me, less stress, but I just don't know

Fallin apart, unable to repeat,
no words, can't speak

Submitted on 2007-05-16 19:54:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  you should take more time when writing so you can get your ideas out more
and try to use the whole word eg. falling
not being a meanie just helping out
I think you could be a great poet
just take your time

mjs ~
| Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by mjstrees | [ Reply to This ]

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