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    dots Submission Name: all the philosophiesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 884
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsall the philosophiesdots
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    in all the philosophies of loneliness
    i have been
    and i wonder
    where i have become
    again and again i am knowing
    yet have never known
    nor have i been known
    save for one
    the one who did not wish
    to know me
    and i wonder
    what it is about us
    that makes us seek anything
    outside of a good sex life
    and a person to talk to
    all dramas aside
    there's hardly anything more sad
    attached to the mundane
    than empty hands
    folding empty hands
    the cold side of the bed
    is a constantly
    rediscovered
    country




    Submitted on 2007-05-16 20:37:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think you mean "attached" and just have an extra letter.
    There is a depth in this poem that many may not comprehend, but that is what I like BEST. Give me a poem that makes me think, and I'll give you credit and appreciation. Just to add a personal comment, finding the right person makes all the difference! Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      the content is ok, but nothing really interesting outside the folding hands. and if you're not going to punctuate, you may think about using

    breaks
    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by gjenkins | [ Reply to This ]


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