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    dots Submission Name: 16dots
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    Author: OrionsStorm
    ASL Info:    18/M/VA
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 180/247/76
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Lyrics/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 1248
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 526



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       this is a lovely punk song


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    sixteen, what a great number
    not old enough to smoke, too old to play
    not old enough to drink, too old to take the easy way out
    just old enough to get a job, but not a car
    not a boy, not a man, what the hell is wrong with this age

    sixteen sixteen,
    the age that no one knows
    sixteen, sixteen,
    the age where no one cares
    sixteen sixteen,
    the age of stupid dares
    sixteen sixteen,
    full of sucky nightmares







    Submitted on 2007-05-16 20:52:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha awesome!
    yea 16 sucked for me!
    Buster
    | Posted on 2010-02-19 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      awsome.I like it.I love how u put that part together-not old enough to smoke, too old to play
    not old enough to drink, too old to take the easy way out
    just old enough to get a job, but not a car
    I dont no why I just like it
    the other part is when u said-not a boy, not a man, what the hell is wrong with this age
    That part made me laugh,cause its true,and it makes it sound really weird,like ur stuck inbetween.
    good job
    safire~~
    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good. I agree 16 is an odd age, but hey, you get to drive, lol. THis was well writen. Good piece, keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]


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