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    dots Submission Name: I went out to watch the sunrise ... dots

    Author: flyfire
    ASL Info:    17, Female, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 33/19/14
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       this is old s h i t
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    dotsI went out to watch the sunrise ... dots

    ... but it was cloudy
    so I watched a fuzzy glow
    hit dew drops on spring branches
    and then softly,
    softly it started to rain.

    Submitted on 2007-05-16 23:00:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this because you think is going to be something about the sun instead you made the rain just as good
    I wish it was like this at my house it does not stop raining
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by boya | [ Reply to This ]
      Look... I'm sorry that modern society... the society that MOST people follow so blindly is so weak intellectually and spiritually.

    I am not homophobic because by definition that would mean that I am EXTREMELY afraid of homosexual people, and believe me, I am not afraid of them. I am not afraid of schizophrenic people, I'm not afraid of people with post traumatic stress disorder, I'm not afraid of people who have bipolar, and I'm not afraid of people with VERY poor upbringing... Hell, I'm one of them. But of all the FLAWS that one has embedded in his/her personality, Homosexuality is the one that is not considered a weakness by those who SUFFER from it. sure, most homosexuals believe that they are not suffering at all, but when it is all said and done, it weakens them in character and in spirit.

    It does not occur naturally. It is abnormal.

    Basically, what I am saying is that it too is a disease. It is a psychological epidemic that is sweeping the face of the earth and it too will bring distruction to a mass of people.

    Have fun having fun, and when it all catches up to you, you won't be able to say that you did not know it was coming.

    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe I feel your disappointment at the lack of sunrise but... a sense of happiness still there, you were able to witness beauty you weren't expecting. It's wonderful at evoking feeling for me, but the first line doesn't seem to fit with the others.. it's very plain.. blunt, even. And the rest of it is pretty. It could be modified to be as pretty as the other lines.
    | Posted on 2007-05-16 00:00:00 | by feathered lord | [ Reply to This ]

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