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One more tear to cry


Author: soaring eyes
ASL Info:    17/f/ga
Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18 /30 /19
Words: 159
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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One more tear to cry



it falls and it is filled with guilt
like a flower at it's youth beginning to wilt
like a river flowing into an ocean
open wide and deap
like the wind blowing into the leaves
of the trees so steep.
I don't know what to do
I'm so hurt inside
I can no longer hold my head up
in my mind and heart there is no pride
so ashame so sad
so distant from the world so mad
so alone
yet again
life taken from me once more like a battle that I just can't win
one more tear to cry
one more journey to make
one that I know my heart can not take
one more kiss good bye
one last breath or more like a sigh
yes I love you and I thought this was the last from my eyes
but there is still just one more tear left to cry




Submitted on 2007-05-17 09:07:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a lovely and moving write. Everything about it is perfect. Excellent stuff from you.

Frank.
| Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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