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    dots Submission Name: One more tear to crydots
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    Author: soaring eyes
    ASL Info:    17/f/ga
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 18/30/19
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsOne more tear to crydots
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    it falls and it is filled with guilt
    like a flower at it's youth beginning to wilt
    like a river flowing into an ocean
    open wide and deap
    like the wind blowing into the leaves
    of the trees so steep.
    I don't know what to do
    I'm so hurt inside
    I can no longer hold my head up
    in my mind and heart there is no pride
    so ashame so sad
    so distant from the world so mad
    so alone
    yet again
    life taken from me once more like a battle that I just can't win
    one more tear to cry
    one more journey to make
    one that I know my heart can not take
    one more kiss good bye
    one last breath or more like a sigh
    yes I love you and I thought this was the last from my eyes
    but there is still just one more tear left to cry




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      This is a lovely and moving write. Everything about it is perfect. Excellent stuff from you.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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