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    dots Submission Name: You and medots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.86 - 17/47/39
    Words: 228
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 189
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 873



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    dotsYou and medots
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    In this time of day
    Standing here alone
    You and me on my mind

    When time had stopped
    And everyone disappeared
    It's alright cause I love you
    And its nothing but you and me
    on my mind

    Would you honour me
    In this dance?
    Would you kiss away my tears?
    And would you hold me one last time?

    In this darken hour of the night
    Sitting here all alone
    You and me on my mind

    Time kept going on and on
    Continued with their pethetic lives
    It's alright cause I love you
    And its nothing but you and me
    on my mind

    At this time of day
    I could care less
    When it's just you and me




    Submitted on 2007-05-17 10:12:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      interesting truth is emotion it comes out well in this piece of work i liked it
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by thewantedwords | [ Reply to This ]
      pethectic* --> 'pathetic'

    *At this time of day
    I could careless --> care less

    you've got some nice stuff in here ... just need to filter out all of the unnessesary things.

    flyfire.
    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by flyfire | [ Reply to This ]


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