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    dots Submission Name: Addiction (part 2)dots
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    Author: poppi
    Elite Ratio:    7.47 - 72/55/37
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       part two........tell me what ya think. prob wanna read part one first though


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    dotsAddiction (part 2)dots
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    Waking in a cold sweat
    Even Las Vegas wouldn't make this bet
    Unraveling mistake
    Only the needles ache
    Dear intoxication
    Is my minds vacation
    One eyed angel
    Wont ever tell
    The lines are blurred
    With such scenes ubscrurred
    Blissful disaster is what I'm headed towards
    Paper cut skin
    Another day over, another day in
    Needful authority
    I changed my priority
    The idea never incorect
    I'd rather be an insect,
    Under a blade
    I play the only black spade
    Tainted heathen
    Addictions the only season
    This is the build up in my day
    This is where freedom lay
    Darkened sunshine
    A feeling hat isn't even mine
    My words are dust
    The heroin is all I can trust




    Submitted on 2007-05-17 14:48:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this. See? Part two is still awesome, .
    I realllllly liked it. Good job on it, .
    -Missy
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by Pabapfc | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a genius poem syd...i really love it....
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by bloody_raven | [ Reply to This ]


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