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    dots Submission Name: Boxed Reality.dots
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    Author: flyfire
    ASL Info:    17, Female, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 33/19/14
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsBoxed Reality.dots
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    And as the crowd sits there and stares into my fish eyes with their own sky glazed ones, i begin to feel increasingly detached.
    Who, what, where, when, how ... what does it matter?
    Do me a favour, i want to yell, and slap yourselves out of your materialistic and superficial mindsets.
    But i remain silent,
    detached,
    silent and
    detached,
    silent
    and detached,
    silent and detached
    as their unrealistic thoughts become 'The Reality' and the sideless box of their majority perspective closes around me with ominous finality.
    How do i get out of a box with no sides?




    Submitted on 2007-05-17 19:18:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i think you write too much stuff thats short and could be interpreted all the way to hell dude.. its all short, and simple. sometimes short and simple is good but with everything by you ive read ive glimpsed someone who actually wants to say something and youre not doing it. maybe because youve read what people today consider good poetry and youve realized its short because noone likes any effin EFFORT anymore or maybe you just string words together in an attempt to have it all mean something to yourself. but let me tell you as someone who writes crap 24/7 in notebooks, on her arms, on napkins, on reciepts, and online, if youre not saying something real then it doesnt mean a dang thing to anyone. because when you read a freakin 5 line poem its got to be freakin outstanding to communicate the message. just about all of yours fall short of the mark. no offense and im not trying to degrade your work or anything because thats kind of harsh but im being honest because i think you could do better.
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      hm... reminds me of high school... lol but very good. i lked the way it flowed
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      Look... I'm sorry that modern society... the society that MOST people follow so blindly is so weak intellectually and spiritually.

    I am not homophobic because by definition that would mean that I am EXTREMELY afraid of homosexual people, and believe me, I am not afraid of them. I am not afraid of schizophrenic people, I'm not afraid of people with post traumatic stress disorder, I'm not afraid of people who have bipolar, and I'm not afraid of people with VERY poor upbringing... Hell, I'm one of them. But of all the FLAWS that one has embedded in his/her personality, Homosexuality is the one that is not considered a weakness by those who SUFFER from it. sure, most homosexuals believe that they are not suffering at all, but when it is all said and done, it weakens them in character and in spirit.

    It does not occur naturally. It is abnormal.

    Basically, what I am saying is that it too is a disease. It is a psychological epidemic that is sweeping the face of the earth and it too will bring distruction to a mass of people.

    Have fun having fun, and when it all catches up to you, you won't be able to say that you did not know it was coming.

    Peace,
    psyko
    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]
      yea i know how you feel .this mainstream thing sux. iyts like how on earth is this logical that sociaty has to follow this.


    yeahhhh
    laterrrrrrrrrrr

    Grimmm
    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      I like these thoughts of yours. Do not worry you are not alone on this. A lot of us feel this way. But sadly we must be silent and detached because the world is not ready to admit to this type of thinking yet.
    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by Uthmaan | [ Reply to This ]


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