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    dots Submission Name: Metaphor of A Rubik Cube!!!!dots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    Description:
       Feeling really shitty right now...just little things are pissing me off bieng stuck in my house for 3 months on house arrest it driving me crazy i want to get out and see my friends and MY BABY GIRL.....took some lines from another pieces and added to it and re wored it a lil and i know it just stop idk i can't right anymore....tight now


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    dotsMetaphor of A Rubik Cube!!!!dots
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    So much Anger
    So much Hate
    So much more to life,
    but sometimes I think its two late.

    I Dug this hole by myself
    No one else to blame

    From the day of birth
    Pieces of the puzzle where missing
    This Rubik Cube is a metaphor into my life
    The Complication runs cold though my veins
    Causing the same emotional pain
    That has had the power to take me life
    As it has before in the past but did not succeed.
    Death is trying to set things right
    by fixing his mistake,
    By letting me live on in this Life.

    Iím sick of looking for a logical explanation
    to come to a healthy realization.

    I tried self-mutilation
    to let my blood run free only to see,
    The hurt and the pain
    is as blue and as cold as the artic sea.................




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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like this one, sounds like you're going through a lot of pain and there's nothing you can do to release it all.
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, sad. poe
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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