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    dots Submission Name: The Plaguedots
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    Author: black_beauty18
    ASL Info:    25/Female/Hutchinson, KS
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 153/146/46
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 840
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 395



    Description:
        I don't know why I wrote this... I like the point I'm trying to make, but I don't like the actual poem... Doesn't flow right. Anyway, tell me what you think.


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    dotsThe Plaguedots
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    Lurking in the darkness, searching for a host,
    This parasite knows no bounds, it hunts from coast to coast.
    It's passed from mother to child, and from strangers on the street,
    The virus is so contagious, it's passed through our TV screens.
    Millions are afflicted, both "evil" and "pure",
    Hate is the disease, but what is the cure?




    Submitted on 2007-05-17 20:19:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed this one. Nicely done. I especially enjoyed the fourth and the third lines. the way that they ended in coexistence; briliantly done.
    | Posted on 2009-05-14 00:00:00 | by anemrostone | [ Reply to This ]
      !!! my self proclaimed nick name is "The plague"
    so i just had to read this, now ofcourse it ahs nothnig to do with me however, i really liked the way it was written, not too long another bonus, prety short and simple but you said alot, at least to me, i dont know how other people would feel on that matter but i really did enjoy this, and i wanted you to know, thanks
    -the plague
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]
      The flow is a little off in this write but I have got to say the meassage is a Great Message to get out
    If I were you I would work on this a little more because honestly this write has the meassge that can turn into a very powerful write
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get achance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what yu think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-05-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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