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    dots Submission Name: your flashy heavendots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 280
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 521
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1483



    Description:
       hopefully you'll dig this one ani


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    dotsyour flashy heavendots
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    strange in the early twisting shiver
    to be anywhere near moons
    & the healthy to whom
    compels
    the
    womb
    with the liquor of madness
    & the broken interior
    of love's magnet heart

    the ochre claw of your eye
    can be tasseled and shy
    with little hastle
    to a clover
    castle
    in
    the
    sky
    dreams & the milky skulls of scuff
    deleting the walls that you sleep on again

    everything that exists is eternal

    the blood around your eyes
    is your own
    & the tendencies you've shown
    to negate the positive
    laurels dawning on your neck
    & the creeping night
    alight with constantly repeating
    syllables
    wondering when
    the thundering sleep will occur

    the devil of the hands
    is that they are alone
    & how they've grown
    the trees of deciet at your feet
    while night shoots from the roots & evil

    despite geometry
    the guilty ailes of your secret brain
    will extend unending
    through your life
    & drive you insane
    crushing the only hopes
    you never had
    till all there is left
    is a flashy heaven
    you
    call
    what could have been




    Submitted on 2007-05-17 22:19:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      YESss I diggg it..mMmm

    you already know my style..

    and I suree like this one
    except that I'm left with one question..
    Why do you skip lines so much, and put so much space in between words?
    hmm..I'm just curious...
    not that it makes it any less of a poem/prose..
    I just needa answer.

    I loved most of the lines on here..
    My favorite part would be:

    the blood around your eyes
    is your own
    & the tendencies you've shown
    to negate the positive
    laurels dawning on your neck
    & the creeping night
    alight with constantly repeating
    syllables
    wondering when
    the thundering sleep will occur

    and

    strange in the early twisting shiver
    to be anywhere near moons
    & the healthy to whom
    compels
    the
    womb
    with the liquor of madness
    & the broken interior
    of love's magnet heart


    the title was very catchy, I knew right then I would diggg the poem. haha I love that word "dig" very sexual ah
    so from now on you already know me and what I favor

    Thanks for being who you are

    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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