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    dots Submission Name: Closely Distantdots
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    Author: Samuel Bielz
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 151/182/46
    Words: 379
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Now that I'm falling
    From what I once knew
    I can't help but wonder:
    Was it me, or is it you?

    Were my hopes up too high?
    Did I ask for too much?
    You are my best friend
    And I love you as such

    Am I something to you,
    Or is it just in my head?
    Should I take it all back,
    everything that I've said?

    You were always right here
    So close by my side
    All my dark secrets
    In you I'd confide

    You became my world
    It was all about you
    I swear I've never felt
    A love quite so true

    I made you the center
    I gave you my all
    But I was just setting
    Myself up to fall

    Everything I needed
    I found it in you
    Everything I wanted
    It was all in there too

    I need to detach
    And set myself free
    But being your captive
    Was just fine with me

    The best way to hold
    Something I love so much
    Is ever so loosely
    Not to smother with touch

    So I'm letting go
    Of my iron-clad grip
    Because I don't want
    Our close friendship to slip

    It's so hard for me
    Just to let go
    I still love you more
    Then you'll ever know

    I'm sorry I held on
    so tightly to you
    But you're all that I had
    And you're all that I knew

    I'm doing much better
    -Not depending on you
    Thats what I tell myself
    But I know its not true

    You were my drug
    You fixed all my pain
    And now that I crave you
    You think I'm insane

    I know it's unhealthy
    To revolve around you
    So I'll set myself free
    To show my love is true

    Though now I seem distant
    You still own my heart
    I'd die for you gladly
    we'll never really be apart

    'Cause deep down inside
    You've shown me true love
    You're like my own angel
    From God up above

    If you ever feel
    Like nobody's there
    Just think about me
    And how much I care

    I'll be here for you
    Until the day that I'm dead
    When everyone fails you
    Come to me instead




    Submitted on 2007-05-17 23:24:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The rhyme scheme was good, it flowed smoothly.
    Normally people would lose interest around the sixth stanza, but because it flowed together so well they should be able to finish it.

    Co-Dependency…..an interesting topic to choose to write!

    “I'll be here for you
    Until the day that I'm dead
    When everyone fails you
    Come to me instead”

    Reminds me of nice guys finishing last…
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]


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