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    dots Submission Name: Tarnished Circledots

    Author: WolferWaterfals
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 3/1/5
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       poem i did in class one day

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    dotsTarnished Circledots

    There are places both near and far
    Hidden away but always in plain sight
    That you never see but look at all the time
    From the dark filtered green light of the forest floor
    To bright sun lit meadows and blue-green waters
    It always looks the same until you look closely
    And see all the things you never saw before
    But then one day itís just replaced by something
    That is unlivable yet habitable at the same time
    One is specialized for its environment
    And the other specializes its environment for itself
    In the end its just a circle that is completely offset
    By those just trying to survive but not caring
    About the changes and adverse effect that they cause
    And will lead to their own destruction of the home we all share

    Submitted on 2007-05-18 00:50:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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