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    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
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    Author: Gothik
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 94/133/31
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Prose/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       3 am. Hard feelings... not well expressed in words... whatever.


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    dotsAlonedots
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    Wandering in the shallow depths of my mind.
    I face all those memories.
    Those good time shared with my friends.
    You were always there for me.
    If I was sad.
    If I was lonely.
    If I was mad.
    Or even happy.
    One by one,
    They dissapeared,
    Even though,
    They promised to be there.
    They left me one by one.
    First my love...
    Then my friends...
    Gone.
    I can't stand this loneliness...
    What have I done to deserve this...
    My life ended a while ago...
    I ceased to exist.
    I heart is dead.
    So is my hope.
    This is not a prose,
    It is a requiem.
    For all those who left me.




    Submitted on 2007-05-18 01:40:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm afriad we all feel like this more often than we should. You did a nice job with the basic feeling and I think you could make this into a beautifully tragic peice.

    We are alone together.



    Chilz
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by chilz | [ Reply to This ]
      *good times

    for the most part it was decent
    personally i think it would be better without the periods and other punctuation
    most of the time the reader can guess, or moreover intrepet how to read the poem
    without punctuation, but you did good
    just read the poem out loud word for word,
    you will see any mistakes you may have missed while typing it up

    good job,

    mjs
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by mjstrees | [ Reply to This ]


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