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    dots Submission Name: I Don't Knowdots
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    Author: Nessyjane
    ASL Info:    21/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    0.68 - 97/60/44
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 616
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 942



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    dotsI Don't Knowdots
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    I don't know what to do

    Things go downhill from here
    No one to help me, no one to care
    With the skin I choose to tare
    They didn't say life had to be fair

    I don't know where to go

    I cant stop cutting
    Until perhaps my heart stops beating
    In this life I seem to be failing
    I'm sorry, but I'm the one who's hurting

    I don't know who to be

    Suicide is such a temptation
    It's all I think when I'm cutting my wrist with caution
    I'm sitting here releasing all my tension
    Just praying for some kind of redemption

    I don't know why to live

    My blades have become so slippery
    These gashes aren't making me happy
    What happened to living freely
    I don't even feel guilty




    Submitted on 2007-05-18 02:35:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i myself have written a poem I DONT KNOW WHY? but its completely different from this one.
    not completely i mean it is a bit it still holds a bit comparison.



    im sorry for going way beyond trying to explain about myself rather than commenting



    well! i think you wrote this poem as a song i.e you were thinking about how this poem would be if it is a song


    i dobt if it will make a good song but it is not bad poem.
    | Posted on 2007-05-23 00:00:00 | by SAMEER | [ Reply to This ]


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