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    dots Submission Name: dreamdots

    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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       this as some may know one of my journals, after i wrote it and i was checking for errors(something i rarely do) and i was like wow that sounds really "nice" im going to post it to see what people think

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    i had this dream, such a wonderful dream this one was, i was happy, it was summer and i didnt have to have this job that consumes all my time, my best freinds(jenn and trev) didnt work ether i was able to enjoy them both when ever i felt the basic need to be with them, i was happy! i did ALL the things that i wanted to do then plus some, money wasnt a factor to my world of happieness....and then.....i woke up, which was more real? the real world or the dream? i dont know. but i can tell you this: i felt far more in the dream then i have ever felt in my life, so when i woke i really did feel as if i was falling into a dream world, but it was sad reality...

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      It is an excellent example of found poetry. I must concede I am continully impressed by your artistic skill, something I lack. However, if you were of a mind, I would put somethign in to reinforce the reality of the dream, as yoru assertion of it's nature being more real than real lacks a good gut punch that would drive the point home. Your poetry though, do as you will.
    | Posted on 2007-05-31 00:00:00 | by Ignis Fatuus | [ Reply to This ]
      I have thought this ame thought many times
    Is our awake life really the dream and our dreams our real life
    I too have never felt more peaceful with some of my dreams
    And to be honest I really do learn a lot from nightmares as well because I like to evaluate them and let them help me in my awakening life
    Excellent Job!!!
    I look forward to reading more from you in the future
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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