Description: Very short poem. I might make it longer in the future. The purpose for it was to paste it on a profile in a site, but then I decided to post it here :).
Carpe diem -------------------------------------------
I dance like no one's watching.
I write as if the muse is always there.
As if I got the time, I ponder.
Breathe air as though it's never cold.
And life flies by so fast before me,
I'm already seventeen.
Still I feel ever younger
And never stop to seize the day.
I like that, although I reckon the best air to breath is cold :)
This write is definitely a success, as it succeeds in communicating your idea.
Beyond that though, it has a lovely flow to it, paints a picture of someone who is never too busy, even though they are always doing something, just the way I like to be. Life has a way of throwing things at you everyday (like being rained on and soaked in the five minutes between the bus stop and work, so much for sun all day mr weatherman :p) but hey, it's just another experience, another story, another character building exercise (seems to be way toooo many of those) and a life spent in front of a tv/computer/blank wall with nothing ever amiss or adventurous would totally suck.
Life needs love, just like everything else, if you don't love it, then I say your screwed :)
Submission Name: Carpe diem
