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    dots Submission Name: The way you enhanced me Part 1dots

    Author: invisiblerose
    ASL Info:    20/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.02 - 17/24/6
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Part 1 of the years of us.

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    dotsThe way you enhanced me Part 1dots

    I saw you sitting there
    So alone, and unsure
    You recall my kindness
    I wish I could remember

    The tuba you carried drew my attraction for you
    But for a while, I just liked to tease you

    We talked all the time
    But only ever in school
    I wished for more everyday

    Then graduation came
    And I was glad it wasn't ours.

    You sat there waiting for a ride
    And I sat out of boredom

    You stole my crackers
    All I wanted was the cheese
    Yet all year long, I wanted something else
    I wanted to kiss you

    Although, I was just wanted to make you blush
    It was a game
    And a fun one at that

    Then it came, my time to depart
    So I leaned
    Grabbed your face
    And kissed your cheek

    Your face was red
    Very much so

    I laughed for hours
    And thought
    "This is fun!!!"

    We rode together to marching band
    My mom always driving
    Your tuba barely fit
    Especially with that big, fat bari

    But we squished, and I liked it
    You always smelled so good
    Even if your feet happened to triple the size of mine

    You went away for the summer
    And I sadly waited for your return
    Waiting patiently and bored
    I knew you would soon be there

    Then you came
    I was really excited
    We played the video game
    For more than six hours

    Summer than ended
    A new year started
    Created more memories
    And years to come

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