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    dots Submission Name: For the Love of Amon Radots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFor the Love of Amon Radots
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    Amon Ra!
    Your strength pumps through my veins
    You are my King,
    My protector.
    The ruler of my domain.
    I hear your counsel,
    I trust in your discernment.
    I am blessed by your attendance.
    Let us tear down the walls
    and build up trust!

    I see the triple wise ones
    Two golden, one black.
    Lioness' with all seeing eyes,
    Tamed by your kingship.
    We look to the East together.
    Safety has it's roots in truth,
    from truth I grow.

    In your magnificence you remain humble.
    Bowing in service to the Great Queen,
    for the sake of love's embrace.




    Submitted on 2007-05-18 15:24:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. As a kid I was fascinated too by Amon Ra, I always considered him to be the true master of names. Every name of a person in this universe is in his book. I like the tone you used throughout the poem, it reminds me a lot of The Book Of The Dead, which fits the subject matter well.
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a beautiful poem..the only reason i personally dont like it is because im an avid christian...but its a beautiful write none the less
    | Posted on 2007-07-16 00:00:00 | by eagle wing | [ Reply to This ]
      I have been reading a book about Yellowtail - Chief Sun Dancer and Crow Medicine Man and he says, "Acbadadea", which I really connect with to "IT" - If the world had more tolerance and appreciated a positive life/spiritual message over a name we would have a reality much different.

    I concur with Ron! Great!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it a lot
    I use to live in cairo
    so I can relate to the message here
    it is strongly worded
    and shows a displacement for
    belief
    you did a good job
    and welcome back

    mjs
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by mjstrees | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really well written
    I liked the message and the words used to describe that message
    I truthfully believe in order for a person to succeed they need a belief system in effect in their life
    You described this belief perfectly
    Excellent Job!!!
    Its also been awhile since Ive seen you posting
    ITS GREAT TO SEE YOU BACK!!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2007-05-18 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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