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    dots Submission Name: Relentlessdots
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    Author: Sundance
    ASL Info:    20/F
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 15/32/11
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Friendship
    Total Views: 560
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 906



    Description:
       I didn't write this, but my very talented friend did and he gave it to me, and gave me credit for it. Only the first line belongs to me.


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    dotsRelentlessdots
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    Lately these days don't seem to end
    lately these wounds don't seem to mend
    on my knees, I beg to send
    Mercy from heaven for my friend

    A page from stories we've been told
    a message from the days of old
    a soul that suffers, spent and sold
    I'm unworthy to behold



    So deep this river, this divide
    won't sink this ship though far and wide
    a quiet corner safe to hide
    it's safe to hurt, it's safe to cry

    pure as water, sweet as wine
    like an emerald does she shine
    sacred image in my mind
    falls just short of bein' divine



    The song I sing is all I know
    the words are true, the value grows
    milk and honey, blessings flow
    they flow my way, they come and go





    Submitted on 2007-05-18 15:55:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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