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    dots Submission Name: Your Own Worst Enemydots
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    Author: FarFromSanityy
    ASL Info:    15/F/look behind youuu.
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 52/76/34
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 732
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    dotsYour Own Worst Enemydots
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    Would you be here if I needed someone to talk to?
    Or are you too caught up in your happiness charade?
    You've misjudged my character for the last time.
    I'm no where close to what you thought I was.
    I didn't think it would have to end this way
    But I guess everything happens for a reason
    I guess forever really is just a phase.
    And you keep fueling the fire, fueling the fire.
    Why can't you put yourself out of your own misery?
    Please, just let it end already.
    Take back every time you called me a friend of yours
    Because I'm finally beginning to realize
    The person you've kept hidden inside for all this time.
    You're your own worst enemy.
    My words can be so cruel, just as you can be so cruel.
    False accusations never hurt this much.
    I don't hate you, I hate who you are.




    Submitted on 2007-05-19 11:48:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I can really relate to this. The flow was great and the way you went at this was verry original. The only thing was that the line
    "My words can be so cruel, just as you can be so cruel"
    was a little off. Try to phrase it where cruel isn't used twice in the same line, it through off the beat for a moment. Besides that it was a great piece. Keep writing.

    Sarah
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. This I definately can relate to. Amazing way to put this too. this is going on my favs.
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]


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