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    dots Submission Name: Please Keep Medots
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    Author: Imaginth
    Elite Ratio:    5.18 - 43/50/19
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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    Description:
       I wrote this after finding out the guy I really like has yet another girlfriend. He even knows I like him.


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    dotsPlease Keep Medots
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    Keep warm within.
    Keep warm
    Keep warm with me.

    Help me
    make it all worth it.

    Teach me
    how to be normal.

    Show me
    where my heart is.

    Don't ever let me go.
    Don't ever
    Don't ever forget me.

    Tell me
    what I'm doing wrong.

    Save me
    from the hell I made.

    Cure me
    my disease is spreading.

    Always hold onto me
    Always hold
    Always hold the past.

    Stop me
    from hurting others.

    Limit me
    with mental bonds.

    Restrain me
    and my pagan ways.

    Please abandon their ways.
    Please abandon
    Please abandon the future.




    Submitted on 2007-05-19 14:15:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well it do seem like a song lyrics.
    I think all the things you're asking for no one can do them except yourself , not even the guy you like.

    "Please abandon the future"
    didn't really understand it.

    i think your lyrics need some striking lines that really stick in the memory, that's what i love about reading lyrics , you can always find lines that u just wanna memories or relate to.

    but overall good work.

    Have a nice day
    | Posted on 2008-01-15 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      this seems like it
    would be a really good song
    the words flow like lyrics quite well

    its hard to be around someone you like when you know you cant have them
    I know the feeling well

    if he knows whats good for him he'll come to you.


    good poem, mjs
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by mjstrees | [ Reply to This ]


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